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Why some people like dangarous sports and activities?

2008-02-22 18:53:33

New Roman">Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities?

 

 

Why some people are fascinated with dangerous sports and activities is an intriguing problem. From my perspective, people engage in some dangerous activities and sports for various reasons, such as money, entertainment and exploration.  

 

First of all, there is no denying that money is the most important thing for most people in the world. People need money to rich their lives, so they participate some activities no matter how dangerous the activities are. For instance, in Hollywood movies, stunt actors and actresses jump down from high buildings which are burning, drive cars in high speed to strike other cars and so forth. It is feasible for them to die sometimes. Nevertheless, they still take the dangerous activities, in respect that they expect to gain money. They will attain more money while the risks are more dangerous.

 

In the second place, as no doubt, some people who suppose that money is unnecessary for them. This kind of people participate some dangerous sports for pleasure. To give a demonstration, there are a growing number of people select to jump from planes and fly like a bird in the sky. From the TV, I can watch clearly that how dangerous when those high point athletes fly in the sky. They always said that every sport, in fact, is dangerous. When they fly in the sky, they can feel the nature power. It is very exciting. Such is a human nature that human beings urge to conquer the nature and challenge limit to seek pleasure.

 

In addition, another sort of people has interests in exploration. For example, people go to dangerous places for they long for discovering and researching. Currently, more and more news reported that there were wild person appeared in Shen Nong Jia where is an ancient forest in China. Forasmuch as a host of people like scientist go there to find and investigate if there are wild person through exploring.

 

To summarize, taking into account all these elements discussed above, which have expressed that the reasons why dangerous sports and activities are really crucial to some humans in their lives.


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Monica1981的个人空间 删除 Monica1981 发布于2008-02-27 08:24:14
I will do the article you want in a minute...just came back from Christchurch and let me have a rest first!
Monica1981的个人空间 删除 Monica1981 发布于2008-02-22 22:27:17
Okay, this one...

You have good points...

But a few mistakes...

Why some people are fascinated with dangerous sports and activities is an intriguing problem.
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Why is that a problem????

Maybe you mean it is intriguing to discuss why people love to engage themselves in dangerous sports and activities....

Now I will describe them in details.
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no need to say this! because you are writing an essay not a presentation!


In the second place, as no doubt, some people who suppose that money is unnecessary for them. This kind of people participate some dangerous sports for pleasure.
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Secondly, some people participate in dangerous sports and activities more for pleasure rather than money...
(golden rule, you never use two sentences to describe sth which can be totally done clearly in one sentence, babe)


Regarding your second point (pleasure), you didn't give enough evidence....you focus on how dangerous the sport is on TV, which is not appropriate to explain why they do that for pleasure not for money...you should use examples instead of just explaining...such as Richard Brason (He is posibly the richest person in the media industry...so he has shit loads of money - don't use these words in your exam...but Richard Branson has been involved in a number of world record-breaking attempts since 1985, when in the spirit of the Blue Riband he attempted to cross the Atlantic Ocean in the fastest recorded time....therefore, his case proved that people who has money also love dangerous sports and they are definitely after pleasure and self-achievement...)

exploration...you can give examples such as Steve Irwin who is well-known as "The Crocodile Hunter"..and he died while he was doing a research in a forest (eaten by the Crocodile - I think he is a jerk...)...

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In a word, English writing is not only about perfect grammer, spelling or even your opinions....it also about a test of your knowledge...teachers want to know whether this student is widely read and know sth about the world!!!

So Babe, you need to go to google.com everyday and read news from all over the world, Okay? You need to have more knowledge and can give examples to support your argument!

This is very important...
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