Reworked by Daniel of my article

Spring Festival is around the corner and our vacation will come,cheer up!

Around the corner表示就要来到了，不过我想你的vacation 应该在festival 前吧，所以后边的will come不当。可以说，spring festival is coming, and our vacation is around the corner. 中国英语博客基地(English Blogs-英语麦当劳博客空间)5kn$A*U&B
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  The problem is I am in SZ far away from home.It is snowing very very strongly in my hometown(I appreciate thatNew Roman">[I appreciate that表示我对这很感激或者很欣赏，可以改为I love snow] but can't see this year).It is heard from my sister who cried in my phone call.

以上几个名字太零散了，可以变成一句：my sister wept on the phone and told me that it was snowing strongly in my hometown. I love snow, but I can’t see it, since I am far from home in SZ.

 

She wants me to go back home strongly like the snow does. But the ticket is too hard to buy and the traffic is too busy to crash and it’s too hard to buy a ticket.(因果的前后顺序)

 

I am the only one person who wants to go back home among my colleagues and friends, so I am afraid I can't go through the long fearful way.

 

In our office,the pak was back his home Pakistan yesterday.Only his staffs (staff 是个表示整体的名词，没有复数，它本身就是指全体员工，staff) are here. 中国英语博客基地(English Blogs-英语麦当劳博客空间)r1p~2Tl&|4Q ?6x
  For (改为by, by now,到现在为止) now,I haven't got my ticket. Thinking about all I may meet on the train I don't want to go home for the Spring Festival although I am also missing my family and my never-seen niece(my sister said she is very lovely and alike （alike 改为like，alike 后面不接东西，比如，they look alike.） her mother).I am thinking about I can be back home on labor day the next year. And the boss also suggested me like that,he said it is not a right time to go home at this moment. 

 

as the boss suggested it’s not a right time to go home at this moment,so why not labor day next year? That’s a neat idea. (你的句子也未尝不可，这写这些仅作参考)

 

 

 Yesterday afternoon,on my way to dormitory after duty, when a little girl called me:"hello,little aunt!"I was very surprised.

 

I was very surprised when a girl called me “little aunt” yesterday afternoon, on my way to dorm after duty.

 

 

Am I that old?God,maybe I was wearing mature that day.I am always treat （treating）myself as a girl not a woman. Because I have a baby face,people all treat me like that.But in fact,I am not still a child now.I am working not a school girl.

(这个句子前后不平衡，可以改为，I am an office lady, not a school girl. 或者 I am working in a company, not studying in school.)

I should know that have (having) a baby face doesn't mean I am still a child.
r!dr!KF!GM |2T0  Today is Sunday with nothing to do. (这个句子主语是today, today with nothing to do 是不对的，应该是你with nothing to do)

so I came here the office to goof time.

可以变成一个句子，On Sunday, with nothing to do, I came to the office to kill my time.

On the English Blog Website,I only read Daniel and Monica's articles.So many members 改为people there,but (but, and , if, 这些是连接两个完整的句子的，叫做连词，你看你前面的“so many people there”，这不是一个句子，应该改成一个句子“there are so many people, 然后再加but) I don't want to go anywhere except the two. but I just feel like visiting two blogs there.

 

From there,I know Monica is a Kiwi and it seems she knows much about everything.(她好像什么都知道，she seems to know everything)

Learn sth from her articles not only English is good for me.(这个句子很大问题，what I can learn from her article is not only English itself, but sth else.)

 

Daniel is a good friend of me.He is a junior in South China Agriculture University.I am so lucky to know him from (in) an English group.He is not only good at his classes (subjects) but also has many hobbies.

 

I like his articles and voice.You can find many his songs on tudou.com website sung by him. Here I want to thank him gave for giving me so many beautiful songs and articles.
8y;]7xx}:_0  It's very disorderly and I am talking about something meaningless.

  It seems that I am talking about nonsense./ I seem to be talking all bullshit./ okay, cut the long shit.

 

 

The reason is,to be honest,I can't write even in Chinese.

(you can write, “I am not good at writing, not even in Chinese.”)

 

When I was a student,the most nerve-racking is making compositions.I was not a good student, so I always didn't hand in it or asked others to do it for me.

So I had to give no shit to the composition, or just ask others to do it for me

 

I am very confused about how to compose so many words and sentences and why others can do but either me   I can’t.
rr]J3YQ!G-rT%N0  So literature is too hard to me,I have no literary talent. Therefore,for now I can't write out anything else. Here are just sth meaningless in English.